1) Can you please post the original scene? 2) This is nice work overall. You could work on fading in/out your dialogue transitions, overlapping them if necessary. Having ADR will help.
The Office:
1)Try to avoid cutting in the middle of a camera zoom. It is awkward. 2) Your reactions shots of Steph/Jim are pretty weak. Are there any better takes? If not, try to avoid using her for reaction shots. 3) I think you need a longer reaction on Michael after "best boss I ever had". In other words, hold on him for a beat or two before we hear the cab honk. 4) Michael's dialogue gets cut off slightly after "hearing what a great boss I am"
Breaking Bad:
1) Work on fading in/out audio transitions, overlapping if necessary. 2) Overall, this cut feels too fast. You should work on holding the moments that are important (reactions of walt, etc.) 3) Erika (you) looks at camera. Is there a take where you don't look at the camera? 4) Hold Courtney/Walt till she looks back up (otherwise the later cut to the wide shot seems awkward), also hold Anthony's reaction longer here (overall just feels too quick). 5) Jump cut on Courtney/Walt. Avoid if possible.
Connor's Scene:
1) Eye-line issues (discussed in class). 2) Audio transitions really need work here.
Bates Motel:
ReplyDelete1) Can you please post the original scene?
2) This is nice work overall. You could work on fading in/out your dialogue transitions, overlapping them if necessary. Having ADR will help.
The Office:
1)Try to avoid cutting in the middle of a camera zoom. It is awkward.
2) Your reactions shots of Steph/Jim are pretty weak. Are there any better takes? If not, try to avoid using her for reaction shots.
3) I think you need a longer reaction on Michael after "best boss I ever had". In other words, hold on him for a beat or two before we hear the cab honk.
4) Michael's dialogue gets cut off slightly after "hearing what a great boss I am"
Breaking Bad:
1) Work on fading in/out audio transitions, overlapping if necessary.
2) Overall, this cut feels too fast. You should work on holding the moments that are important (reactions of walt, etc.)
3) Erika (you) looks at camera. Is there a take where you don't look at the camera?
4) Hold Courtney/Walt till she looks back up (otherwise the later cut to the wide shot seems awkward), also hold Anthony's reaction longer here (overall just feels too quick).
5) Jump cut on Courtney/Walt. Avoid if possible.
Connor's Scene:
1) Eye-line issues (discussed in class).
2) Audio transitions really need work here.
http://youtu.be/5aba-cm1GDY
ReplyDeleteThis is the original bates motel scene. Up until 1:23